“It’s not that I want you alive – quite the opposite. I’ll even kill you myself, after my dramatic monologue.”
Meh. You can do better.
“He’ll find you. He’ll kill you. He’s not so different than I.”
Still not right.
What does it take to properly tell someone you are going to kill them, and more important, why?
You’d never kill someone without telling them why.
Just an ego thing. Not like they actually need to know: they’ll be dead in a moment.
It’s all about your ego.
A great monologue does wonders for your ego, irrespective of its effects on your soon-to-be victim.
“I don’t care whether you live or die. Wait; that’s a lie. I do indeed want you dead, but – ”
That was terrible.
Perhaps you should start with the point.
“I want you dead.”
Simple. Clean. Sticks to the facts.
Any other facts?
“I want you dead. So does he.”
How to finish? You consider “But, I don’t want him to find you.” But, you don’t like starting sentences with “But.”
You go back to those three simple rules: Simple. Clean. Stick to the facts.
“I want you dead. So does he. I don’t want you and him to talk.”
Bah. This sucks. You can’t get it to work.
Now, it is time for some dramatic license.
You’ll have to leave the exposition for later. Your audience – and rest assured, you will have an audience, for what is a dramatic monologue without one? – won’t understand why you want this David dead; why you don’t want him found; why you don’t want him to kill David; why you don’t want David to talk; why you don’t think he is ready for it.
You said you’d never kill someone without telling them why. This should teach you never, ever to say never – ever.
You hope your audience will be willing to suspend their disbelief, as you don’t really think this monologue is terribly realistic. A real person wouldn’t say something like this.
Then again, you’re real enough, and you’re saying it.
You do think it is terribly epic.
You have to admit, sushi is enticing. But there are more urgent matters to attend to.
You point the barrel of the gun up his nose, and his eyes go wide.
You open your mouth, and begin to speak.